Persuasive Writing

Later today we are going school swimming. For writing this morning we did some persuasive writing on the topic 'Why every child should learn to swim.'

We had to use paragraphs, have an introduction, use 2-3 points with the key words, and make sure we had a conclusion.

Key words were; danger, life skill, important, survive, survival, sport, exercise, fun, rivers, creeks, beaches, lakes, ocean, sea, job, teach

Here are two examples of persuasive text written this morning, they are still in draft form;

Every Child In New Zealand needs to learn to swim

I believe every child in New Zealand needs to learn to swim.

Every child needs to learn to swim because the fun you can have with your friends and family, such as falling off the biscuit, jumping off the wharf and playing in the pool. Also building dams and rafting.

Also another sport you can do even if you don’t want to do swimming it’s still good training for your other sports. 

Lastly New Zealand has lots of water such as beaches, lakes, rivers and creeks, and New Zealand is surrounded by water.

Every child in New Zealand needs to learn to swim. 

Waiting patiently for our instructions

Why every child needs to know how to swim

Every child needs to learn to swim it is a serious life skill and every child needs to know how to swim! 

These are the reasons I believe it is so important. Firstly it is so much fun playing in the water with all of your friends and if all of your friends know how to swim and they love the water you're basically missing out on all the fun. It also means you can do fun triathlons water challenges and go to the beach.

Secondly, it is a life skill. What happens if you are in the middle of the sea and your boat tips? You will have a life jacket on but you will still have to swim or tread water and you will have no water confidence, however if you know how to swim you will have a much better chance of survival than the people that do not know how to swim. If you fall in a 3 meter deep pool and you don't know how to swim you are obviously going to drown and die and if you know how to swim  you could save somebody's life.

Lastly it is great exercise and sport it is a really really good exercise because it does not pressure you muscles. You could get really good job and take your career to the limit and get into the Olympic or Commonwealth Games. 

These are the reasons I believe learning to swim is something that every child in New Zealand must do. What do you think about it?

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